The IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 Band 9 Sample Answer below is a response to Academic Writing Task 1a, which you can download from the ielts.org website.
The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows how many male and female students were studying full-time or part-time in further education in Britain between 1970/71 and 1990/91. Overall, the vast majority of students were part-time and there were more students in 1990/91 than in 1970/71, especially women.
Looking firstly at part-time versus full-time study, it is clear that most students were part-time in each year shown in the chart. The number of part-time students was over 700,000 per gender per year, going as high as 1.1 million, whereas for full-time study the number was between 70,000 and 250,000.
Moving on to look at gender differences, numbers of female students increased in both full-time and part-time education whereas the number of males in part-time education decreased. For example, there were 70,000 full-time and about 750,000 part-time female students in 1970/71, but by 1990/91 these numbers had risen to over 200,000 full-time and around 1.1 million part-time. The number of male full-time students also went up from around 100,000 in 1970/71 to over 200,000 in 1990/91, whereas for part-time study their numbers went down from 1 million in 1970/71 to around 850,000 in 1980/81, before rising slightly to about 900,000 in 1990/91.
IELTS Writing Marking Criteria and Task 1
Remember the IELTS Writing Marking Criteria? Read the essay again and ask yourself these questions for each of the following criteria:
- Is there a clear overview of the main trends and/or differences?
- Are all the key features described?
Coherence and Cohesion
- Is the information organised logically?
- Is there a range of linking words and phrases?
- Is there a range of vocabulary?
- Are there any examples of less common vocabulary and collocations?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
- Is there a variety of structures?
- Are there frequent error-free sentences?
The answer to all of the above questions is ‘Yes’, which is why this answer is Band 9. You can use the questions above to review your own essays and improve your IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 answers too.